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1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩; 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号;
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由; 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>;
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Our Holiday Life
Dear Betty,
I’m glad to have received your letter. Our holiday life has changed a lot. In the past, we had to study at home, doing much homework, which made our holiday bored①. Now, learning and relaxing still is② very important, but we also can③ do some other things. For example, we usually help our parents do housework and④ farm work. I think they are very important to help us to understand our parents. In addition to⑤, we take part in some social activities as volunteers to help others.
In short, the present holiday can bring us great fun and we can benefit a lot from it. I really like it very much.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Wei Xuexia
安徽省濉溪县百善中心学校九(1)班 魏雪侠
1. 优点:
小作者对自己的假期生活作了详细的描述,交错运用了许多复杂句,层次分明、过渡自然、语句通顺.
2. 需要修改的地方:
①改为boring.形容某物应使用boring.
②改为are still.句子主语为learning and relaxing,谓语动词应用复数形式;另外still应放在系动词后,故应把still is改为are still.
③改为can also.also应放在情态动词之后,实意动词之前.
④改为or.“帮父母做家务或是在农场劳动”为选择关系,这里的连词应用or.
⑤删去to.介词to后面无宾语,所以这里应把to去掉.“in addition”意为“另外,此外”.
3. 评分:
按中考英语作文满分25分的标准,本文修改前可得22.
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